Essay Instructions: I sent this paper in to my teacher , the first part has her instruction, the second part is what I wrote, there are side comments stating what she didn't like. I received a 59%. Everything I have turned into this teacher is completely wrong. I would Like someone to look at her comments, what I wrote, and fix it if possible in a way that might please her.
This part is what she wanted: Identify means of applying social justice for vulnerable populations that eliminate health disparities. (paper)Audience: Policy makers in government or an organization1.Describe your audience. 2.Describe the method of communication.3.Describe the goals of the communication of what you want to accomplish.4.Present the communication in a format that fits the audience- email, letter, letter to the editor of the newspaper or a response to a blog posting, etc.5.Evaluate how you would know if the communication was effective.6.Include documentation to support the action that you are requesting.7.APA format and spelling, grammar, writing scholarly. This part is what I wroteHerbert Humphrey said, ?The moral test of the government is how that government treats those who are in the dawn of their life, the children; those who are in the twilight of life, the elderly; and those who are in the shadow of life the sick, the needy, and the handicapped? (Harkness & DeMarco, 2012, p. 431). How we treat others reflects how much we value life.What is the value of human life? I ask you to take a moment from the comfort of your warm, velvet seats in Congress, inside your secure life, with white, gleaming marble walls and floors, and with rooms filled with refreshing central air. Take a moment from the place where your family has the security of clean water, nutrition, and access to healthcare, far from the life of the impoverished and dying. See my world of injustice and inequity, where a young woman lies dying, with her youngest child lying in her arms. I watch him play with his truck so quietly and softly so his mommy can sleep. She is my patient, as well as her family, because they are all in crisis at this time. I grab the sweet little boy a milk and some crackers because I know he often goes without breakfast. His father, a Guatemalan refugee who speaks little English, tries to hide his despair when I enter the room. Sometimes I see him praying quietly at her side, then I pray silently, asking God to help them.They have no insurance and inadequate knowledge to make informed decisions. Because of her condition, she could no longer speak, and due to the medications, my young mother had developed an odor permeating from her skin. I was told people had difficulty keeping the interpreter to stay long enough to have a needed in-depth conversation with him. As her advocate, I felt it was my duty to make sure her husband was informed because she could no longer speak. I could get angry at this whole situation of cultural barriers, limited knowledge of health conditions, and inadequate access to healthcare. I have seen numerous patients in this same position, one which could have been avoided if there were better prevention and education strategies. Whatever the reasons, many people, mostly the poor, wait until he damage is irreversible. This lack of access to healthcare had worsened her condition, but I knew my frustration would not serve my patient, so I took the young husband out into the hall, to a room where the interpreter and husband could sit, and we talked. I felt my patient was going to fall through the cracks in this system despite my efforts. How could I help this from happening repeatedly? How can this be prevented? How can we, as citizens of humanity, change the structure of healthcare so that it does not forget our impoverished families? In a time where civilization has the ability to care for every human soul, I ask you, what is the value of human life?I am writing to Congress to give you a better understanding of the healthcare system today, in the hope that my words may reach people and open a few doors of thought leading to action. I would like people to understand my plight as a nurse working within the healthcare system, who cares about humanity and the suffering of others.There is a framework design theory that incorporates health and social justice called the ?health capability paradigm.? This theory states ?all people should have access to the means to avoid premature death and preventable morbidity?. (Rugar, 2010, p. 224).This theory ?incorporates the philosophical, economic and political, that all societies (through public?private partnerships) can design and build effective organizations and systems to achieve health capabilities? (Rugar, 2010, p. 224).What is the concept you ask? Health capability ?enables us to understand the conditions that facilitate barriers that impede health and the ability to make health decisions? (Rugar, 2010, p. 2). Rugar analyzes these fundamental "why" problems: Why is it so difficult for some populations or individuals to translate health resources into health outcomes? Why have health literacy efforts been only moderately successful? Why do some individuals have such difficulty adhering to specific treatment regimens? Why are some individuals harmed or helped by cultural norms about health behaviors? (Rugar, 2010, p. 1).Health capability measures how well people can act as agents of their own health by assessing their abilities, skills, habits, and beliefs. ?It does not just measure individual health; it also factors in situations and conditions that determine a person?s health? (Rugar, 2010).Have you ever wondered what a person could become, given the most ideal environment? I have wondered what would become of this quiet little boy who gave his mommy silent wet kisses and played with his truck if he were given the knowledge and resources to make healthy choices for himself. He might even become a doctor because he remembered the care his mother received. Alternatively, would he be forgotten and die at a very young age from conditions beyond his control?How healthy a person is encompasses his or her personal beliefs, values, and health related goals as well as the ability to recognize damaging behaviors and the external factors that form the framework of a person.There are also internal factors at work within a person; for example, health conditions like HIV or diabetes, along with how the person states they feel and their emotional and mental wellbeing. A person?s general information about health, diet, preventative care, and disease processes, as well as their knowledge base on where to receive information about their disease processes or modes of transmission all affect wellbeing. A child that is growing up with intolerance, poverty, and hunger can develop unhealthy views. This model can help develop strategies that may foster socioeconomic policies that will focus on prevention and motivation to improve health and break through barriers.To be most effective, it should begin when a child is very young. The focus should be on maternal and child health, clean drinking water and nutrition, and continuing education through life (Fukuda, 2001).What would the world look like if we saw every person as a true brother and sister? What would the world look like if we loved thy neighbor as thyself? Mark 12:31 (King James Version). One day, global citizenship that incorporates justice and fairness will be formed, eliminating poverty and equity.People need the ability to choose a healthy lifestyle, as well as information about why it is important in ways they can understand. All people deserve to have a healthy lifestyle and access to healthy foods and safe drinking water. A person cannot make healthy choices when they are physically, mentally, and spiritually malnourished.I believe I will see that little boy again someday, this time as a man, and I believe that, in some way, we had helped him where we could not help his mother. He will be walking down the hallway with a stethoscope, remembering the excellent care his mother was given, and in turn, he will give back to the next patient he sees, with a little boy lying on his mother?s lap, giving her little wet kisses.?ReferencesFukuda, S. P. (2001). The human development paradigm: Operationalizing Sen?s ideas on capabilities. Feminist economics, 9(2?3), 301-317. Abstract retrieved from http://www.ibero.edu.mx/humanismocristiano/seminario_capability/pdf/11.pdfHarkness, G. A., & Demarco, R. F. (2012). Community and public health nursing evidence for practice. Philadelphia, PA: Lippincott Williams & Wilkins.Rugar, J. P. (2010). WHO
